Writing Challenge #1 (Results)

 

Below are the responses/chosen entries from our two guest judges, Tamara Leigh & Rosemary Hines. I am honored that they were willing to take the time out of their busy lives to participate in this writing challenge! What a blessing!  I'm sure you will enjoy their insight! Thank you to all who participated. Stay tuned to Ritty's Writing Challenges for the next photo challenge! Click HERE and go to the comment section to read all the entries for this writing challenge.

From Rosemary: 

Although I was impressed by all the entries, my selection for this week's winner is Christina Banks and "Trouble in Tranquility." 

In addition to the catchy title, I loved the succinct opening phrases:  

A missing girl
A murdered man
A mysterious clue

They immediately caught my attention and drew me into the story idea. Christina did a brilliant job of giving just enough information to compel me to read the story without giving details that I would prefer to read in the novel itself. The genre was clear, the plot intriguing, and the characters captured my heart in one short paragraph. I found myself caring about Detective Reed and his daughter, eager to open the book and find out what would happen. 

 

What a great writing exercise, Rhonda! As her prize for being a winner, I'd like to offer Christina a free ebook of the first novel in my Sandy Cove series, Out of a Dream. If she has already read it, I'm happy to give her an ebook of Through the Tears or Into Magnolia ~ her choice!

 

Blessings,

Rosemary Hines

www.rosemaryhines.com

https://www.facebook.com/RosemaryHinesAuthorPage

 

 

From Tamara: 

 

Hi Glynis,

Congratulations on being chosen as a winning entry of Ritty’s Writing Challenges.  Your book blurb caught my eye and made me itch to have the novel in my hands. Send your email address to tamaraleigh@comcast.net to claim your prize of a choice of any one of the following ebooks:

1) Stealing Adda
2) Dreamspell: A Medieval Time Travel Romance
3) The Unveiling: Book One in the Age of Faith series

And now for a little feedback via editing and comments for, "A Perfect Peace" (Note: suggestions only; take what works for you, toss out what doesn’t):

Gone are the carefree days of youth when Lacey Dobbs and James Hanson ran barefoot through the grass and spent hours together on Silver Lake (I think you should insert the name up front), dreaming about the perfect lives that lay ahead of them.

Fifteen years later, Lacey, a divorced and single mother, returns to her hometown. Disappointed in herself and needing the strength of her family, she discovers they are more intent on displaying perfection to the outside world than fixing the broken people inside.

James has never left the shores of Silver Lake, convinced he doesn't need anyone or anything except his secrets and dreams. (“secrets” is a great hook, but I would expand this a bit more to include, perhaps, a mention of Lacey; i.e.: But then Lacey returns and…).

Thrown together by circumstance and unable to forget their dreams of the life they should have shared, is this finally their time for love? Or are they destined to drift along Silver Lake—separate, missing the crucial pieces that would bring them a perfect peace and the realization of their dreams?

Why did I like your blurb?
 
1) Well written
2) Concise
3) The set up: brief back story, the heroine today, the hero today, and the possibility of a future together providing they can overcome the conflict that’s keeping them apart.

Congratulations, Glynis!